
cawing in the morn
crows share news
through wireless channels
Lune
The Lune is also known as the American Haiku. It was first created by the poet Robert Kelly (truly a great poet) and was a result of Kelly’s frustration with English haiku. After much experimentation, he settled on a 13-syllable, self-contained poem that has 5 syllables in the first line, 3 syllables in the second line, and 5 syllables in the final line.
Unlike haiku, there are no other rules. No need for a cutting word. Rhymes are fine; the subject matter is open. While there are fewer syllables to use, this form has a little more freedom.
Kelly Lune example –
trees never wander
but still spread
across open fields
There is a variant lune created by poet Jack Collom. His form is also a self-contained tercet, but his poem is word-based (not syllable-based) and has the structure of 3 words in the first line, 5 words in the second line, and 3 words in the final line.
As with Kelly’s lune, there are no other rules.
Collum Lune example –
An envelope labeled
loose change holds coins meant
for loose teeth.
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This seems an easier form of poetry
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It’s easy, Sadje. There are very few restrictions.
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Yes it looks doable for me
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💖
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👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼
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Did you see the moon about two nights ago? It was a sliver of a silver bowl. We’ve had rain the last few days…
Fun that birds communicate while balancing on ‘wires’ 😉
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We saw a moon sliver with a planet – don’t know which one and maybe Venus. It was gorgeous!
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Probably venus…
“Visible night of Mar 21 – Mar 22, 2023 Venus shines as a bright ‘evening star’ Coming up: around March 23/24, Venus appears close to a thin Crescent Moon.”
😀
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Yes, that is what we saw! It was so clear as if it was painted on the sky.
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I love your opening poem as it feels perfect for those mornings when we awaken to birdsong! Thank you also for sharing some insight into the different forms of haiku. 🙂
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Thank you, Layla! I am delighted you enjoyed it.
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I like your Lune. That is a new form for me. Thanks for introducing it.
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Thank you, Heather! I am glad you liked it.
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I really did. You’re welcome.
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As always, wonderful poetry
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Thank you, Patricia.
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Well done. XO
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Thank you, Ellen. XO
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These are both fine poems with clear, amusing, points
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Thank you, Derrick.
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oh thanks love this.. it’s in my notes.. for a rainy day.. wait, it’s pouring .. oh well another rainy day.. I’m socked in.. lol ❣️
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Wishing for sunshine to come your way, Cindy! 💖🌞
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Yes, reminds me of the chorus I wake up to every morning!
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Caw caws are better to hear than the lies we hear in the news.
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Absolutely!! 🙂
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